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'No Sammy, this is not right...' Dean was checking on his homework and pointed so many errors that Sam was about to cry, it was late and he was tired 'look, go to bed I'll wake yuup early and we will see ok?' pushed him towards the bathroom, Dean is not always like that sometimes he's mean for no good reason, Just like dad, and with mother's day coming, Sam doesn't know what to do, but the teacher choosed him to read his compossition on the festival and he's very proud, because he's the one who read best, he's been called smart, at first he started something like

'Why I have no mother by Samuel Winchester

When I was six months old my mother died so I never get to know her, then my dad had to start traveling wiht his new job so I don't have a home either, all I have is my brother Dean.
My dad is not bad he's always sad and sometimes he drinks too much, but he love us, that's what Dean tells me every night.'

But Dan read that and was upset, don't let dad find that recomended and caused Sam to throw a fit, but as usual his older brother controlled him with no problem, after all noone will ever known him better than his Dean.

'Dean...?' and his older brother left his own homework to look into his face with a smile... as usual 'tell me about mom...' green eyes flicker for a sec with a pain Sam almost miss being only seven, you don't really understand all the feelings in other people but this is Dean and his eyes will always show everything, at least for Sam, and Dean told him, how She was always warm and smelled like lilac, and the wayshe always kissed them good night and told them the angels will look after them, and Dean hides a tear and all Sam can do is hug him, then dean told him about what others think a mother is and something in Sam eyes changes in the way he looks at Dean.

that's why after he eats the breakfast Dean made for him ran to show his paper to Dad, Dean cannot see this, at first dad eyes are cold and bored, then turns into wattery pools that scare Sam even more, at the end he just holds his younger son on his lap and hug him.
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'Now we have 2th grade Samuel Winchester, he'll read his composition 'why I have no mom'' The whole auditorium awwed and Dean sitting next to his father growled, they had no right to pity Sam... and what was this little dummy to read it in front of the whole school

'When I was six months old my mother died so I don't have a mother, all I have is dad and Dean, my older brother, he's the one who taught me the most, he explained me what a mom is and what a mom does, he said a mother is always there for you, and that she make you feel better when you're sad, she takes care of you and feed you and tug you in bed and kisses good night to you, she's always there for you when you're sick, but I don't have a mom, all I have is Dean.'
the whole room was quiet
'He's there for me, since I remember, he feeds me and take care of me, he picks me up from school and goes home with me, he's always patient even thought I'm not always good, he's there at nights when I have a nightmare and always let me get the best of everything, he even keep using old shoes so I can get new ones, he fought two kids that were bullying me and he bleed still the first thing he did was ask me if I was ok, he's brave and when monsters came he promised he'll deffend me even if they kill him'
people laughed, morons Dean thought, if they knew.. and why Sam was telling them anyways?
'Pay attention Kid, your brother worked hard on that paper for you' and his heart felt weird, what was that? so he turned to listen Sammy again
'Dean was very young when mom died too and sometimes I feel sad because, even though our dad loves us he never did for Dean what he does for me, I know that he miss mom more than I do becaue eh remembers her, and I know he wish she were with us and that this day is harder for him than it is for me, I know his friends makes fun of him for carrying me all the time, I know sometimes he's scared but he has to be brave to protect me and I think is not fair, I wish my brother had a Dean to look after him too.

that's why I'm not sad for not having a mom, because I have Dean and I never tell him this but I love him, and I want to be like him when I grow up' Sam was scared maybe this wasn't the right thing to say because most of the ladies were crying, and Dean's mouth was open while tears were rolling down his cheeks, man! he made Dean cry, he should never do this...

'Thank you' ended and the thunder of applauses made him a little afraid, came down with th esame little box all the kids on his class had for their moms and gave it to Dean, he tossed the box in his seat and held his little brother 'you liked it?' dean didn't answered, he never answered, John literally dragged his older son to this because mother's day was always hard for Dean, and he wanted to stay at home watching TV, Dad promised Sam he'll make Dean go, and after all this years, looking into his little brother while he was sleeping made Dean's heart swell, yeah maybe he's been called a mom but he loved Sammy back then as much as he loves him now

'rise and shine Sammy' turned the radio on, Asia's heat of the moment, great, Damn this Tuesday promised to be a great day


I was patrolling last night and during long long hours out there trying not to fall asleep this came to my head, I'll try to improve it as soon as I get some time

Date: 2008-12-20 01:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lovetheguys.livejournal.com
You need a beta, but this is a marvelous, touching, heart-rending, beautiful story!

Love, Robin

Date: 2008-12-20 03:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stawberynvanila.livejournal.com
Awww, very sweet, love the way Sammy understands what Dean is doing for him. ;)

You might need a beta but you're doing well, keep it up. :)

*Hugs*

Date: 2008-12-20 06:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bodgei.livejournal.com
this was lovely. you could use someone to look it over for you before you post - but other then that (and we all need that) it was very touching.

Date: 2008-12-21 01:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] szarabasjka.livejournal.com
I know I need a beta, esp since I have no time to check on my spelling I think I wrote this in like 15 mins with my whole unit reading over my shoulder...*bastards...*

glad you liked, I have a season finale for S4 too lol that made a friend offered reindeer poop as present, Think that means is not good lol.

Date: 2008-12-21 01:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] szarabasjka.livejournal.com
I tried to write as a 7 year old would write but... think I did a very good job...

seriously considering sbout the Beta and I accept any help you and others ould give me.

Glad you liked the story

Date: 2008-12-21 01:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] szarabasjka.livejournal.com
Glad you liked and I'll accept your help if you have the time.
thank you very much for your coments.

Date: 2008-12-21 03:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] stawberynvanila.livejournal.com
English is my third language, so it wouldn't be of much help to you. I hope you can find someone. I think there is a site [livejournal.com profile] spn_beta you can try looking there or at similar LJs.

Date: 2008-12-21 12:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lovetheguys.livejournal.com
Tell your "friend" that constructive criticism is needed, not reindeer poop!

Love, Robin

Date: 2008-12-21 05:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bodgei.livejournal.com
sure I'd love to help. Let me know when. this week (withthe holidays) is kinda rought for me. But after that I should be albe to help. My grammer isn't perfict - so you may want two betas (I use two betas for my fan fiction if I can just because everyone has their own take on things)

Date: 2008-12-22 10:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] szarabasjka.livejournal.com
Thank you I'll try there, whenever I force myself to post anuything like this again...

I kinda speak four languages, the problem is that since I went to school in different countries and different languages my grammar and spelling is very messy now, when is not technical english.

I'm seriously thinking about posting myseason finale...

Kisses

Date: 2008-12-22 11:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] szarabasjka.livejournal.com
is ok if I send you my season finale? 'cause that one really needs help, it started as this one, another idea on a long night patrolling, and it came kinda nice,so it sok if I sent it as a private message? then you can read it and correct it whenever you have the time ok?

Date: 2008-12-23 01:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bodgei.livejournal.com
You can pm me no prob. Or you can e-mail it to me.

Date: 2008-12-24 01:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] szarabasjka.livejournal.com
there's this little problem with e-mails... as far as I've heard others read them and it would be kinda... embarassing right now.
so.. PM?

thank you very very much

Date: 2008-12-24 01:35 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bodgei.livejournal.com
OK, no problem

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